Episode 30: Novel Excerpt - Meet Your Guardian Angel by Ruth Weiner
Episode 29: Short Story - An Inanimate Proposal by Nicholas Gregory Schwab
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 5:23.
Click here to download the original pages from the short story submission from Ohio titled "An Inanimate Proposal."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the short story submission from Ohio titled "An Inanimate Proposal."
Episode 28: Memoir - Floating in Salt Water by Barbara Carter
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 10:20.
Click here to download the original pages from the memoir submission from Nova Scotia titled "Floating in Salt Water."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the memoir submission from Nova Scotia titled "Floating in Salt Water."
Episode 27: Dystopian YA Excerpt - Moving Walls by Robert Owens
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 8:57.
Click here to download the original pages from the short story submission from Maryland titled "Moving Walls."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the short story submission from Maryland titled "Moving Walls."
During the episode, Dave mentions a book he deems "great," despite "not one sentence being grammatically correct." The book is The Painter by Peter Heller. Check it out on Amazon and see what you think.
Episode 26: Novel Excerpt - Red Satin Ribbons by Donna B. Comeaux
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 8:52.
Click here to download the original pages from the short story submission from Oklahoma titled "Red Satin Ribbons."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the short story submission from Oklahoma titled "Red Satin Ribbons."
Episode 25: Short Story - The Divorce That Almost Was by Bertha Pruitt
Writer's Infusion Episode 25: The Divorce That Almost Was
Read MoreEpisode 24: Middle Grade Excerpt - Casey Buckles and the Keeper of the Ice Caves by Dani Camarena
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 11:00.
Note: This excerpt is from the middle of the story.
Click here to download the original pages from the Middle Grade submission from Idaho titled "Casey Buckles and the Keeper of the Ice Caves."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the Middle Grade submission from Idaho titled "Casey Buckles and the Keeper of the Ice Caves."
Episode 23: Memoir Excerpt - The Constancy of Entropy
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 13:35.
Click here to download the original pages from the memoir submission from New Jersey titled "The Constancy of Entropy."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the memoir submission from New Jersey titled "The Constancy of Entropy."
Episode 22: YA Novel Excerpt (middle of story) - author anonymous
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 4:10.
Click here to download the original pages from the YA submission from Alabama.
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the YA submission from Alabama.
Episode 21: Literary Novel Excerpt - Bleeding in Babylon by H.L. Lee
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 11:15. Don't miss our brief interview, though, at the beginning of the episode!
Click here to download the original pages from "Bleeding in Babylon."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from "Bleeding in Babylon."
Episode 20: Short Story Excerpt - Stack Up the Words by Bailey Tamayo
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 8:47.
Episode 19: Middle Grade Excerpt - Uprising by Betsy Melodia
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 7:00.
Episode 18: "Go" Stage Play Adaptation by Carly Greenberg
This is an excerpt from the 148-page stage play adaptation by Carly Greenberg, based on the first Beat novel titled “Go” by John Clellon Holmes.
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 10:04. (We all took a part, though; it might make it easier to follow along!)**
Click here to download the original pages from the "Go" adaptation.
Click here to download the critiqued pages from the "Go" adaptation.
**A couple of notes about this episode:
Per Carly's note, we'd like to clarify that 1) Carly wrote this as a stage play, not a screenplay (although she may also write the screenplay!), 2) the event Dave mentions during the critique, namely Pasternak drugging Dinah and taking advantage of her/the characters ending up on the ground, does not occur in the scene. Instead, it is Kennedy who drugs everyone in the room while they're all seated, and then carries a "giggling" Dinah offstage. When Pasternak leads Kathryn offstage, she is not drugged. In Act 1, it is implied that Kathryn and Hobbes attempt to follow the new "moral understanding" of an open marriage (which later turns into a mess). And 3) "Maman" refers to Pasternak (Jack Kerouac's French mother).
Episode 17: Short Story - Hawsers by Samuel Simas
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 6:55.
Click here to download the original pages from "Hawsers."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from "Hawsers."
Episodes 16A&B: Short Story Excerpt - Sook's Cake by Bonnie Furlong
Hello Fellow Writers,
We received a submission and did not realize that we had received the middle pages of the story when we filmed the critique. To avoid this issue in the future, we updated our submission form. In this instance, however, we thought it only fair to perform the critique on Bonnie's first pages as well. The results are interesting. Watch both episodes and let us know what you think!
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 7:04.
Click here to download the original, middle pages from "Sook's Cake."
Click here to download the critiqued, middle pages from "Sook's Cake."
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 7:30.
Click here to download the original, first pages from "Sook's Cake."
Click here to download the critiqued, first pages from "Sook's Cake."
Episode 15: Literary Novel Excerpt - The Telling: A Novel of the Great Devouring
If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 8:43.
Click here to download the original pages from "The Telling: The Novel of the Great Devouring."
Click here to download the critiqued pages from "The Telling: The Novel of the Great Devouring."