If you want to skip ahead to the critique, read the pages on your own (links below) and go to minute 11:00.
Note: This excerpt is from the middle of the story.
Click here to download the original pages from the Middle Grade submission from Idaho titled "Casey Buckles and the Keeper of the Ice Caves."
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